2018/11/25 - Story feedback

• An ancient civilization was the one that created a super non-physical creature that has mental powers beyond any thing known. The intent was to combine it with a human giving the human healing and mental powers beyond anything known. It was the next step in the human evolution.
• There was one man opposed to the unethical practice, Storm, saying just cause we can, we shouldn't.
• The creature though felt imprisoned and thought that it's so much better than these humans, turns evil and overtakes a few people turning them into monsters. The monster broke out of its contamination and used its power to destroy this civilization, turning people on each other. He enjoys seeing them destroy each other, consumed with hatred for them for thinking that they made him a slave. Storm was able to lead an exodus from this city. He was a scientist and was able to invent something to make himself immune to the mind controlling power of the monster.
• Storm led the people out of the city and erected a forcefield to lock the monster in and hide the city from view. The monster inside can't get in, and no one outside can go in. The monster left imprisoned in a destroyed society and with no one to bond with becomes weak and has to go in a special status pod that keeps him alive. The only way to get out of the status pod is if someone enters the status pod. Then the monster can bond with him.
• The longer the creature remains bonded to a person, the more that person becomes integrated into the monster and soon he becomes completely absorbed and the person is no longer there. Then the monster needs to find someone else.
• There are two ways the person overtaken by the monster be freed. One he has to will him away, which is practically impossible given that the monster has such strong mind controlling power. The second is to use a specific device to pry the monster off. But then the monster can over take another person.
• The people whom Storm led out from the city, got rid of their technology and intermarried with the people of the land.
• Storm is the only one who had the key to the forbidden city and he kept it a secret until the day of his death.
• As truth faded and became legend the story was changed to what we now know (already written in the first episode)
• Storm married and had a family. Danny is one of his descendants and he has this ability not to fall under the influence of the monster.

I think this is leaps and bounds better than what we had. I'll have to do a rewrite of the episodes I have to accommodate this change. It also provides material for more episodes so Eliza and Danny discover all these details.